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My sister sweet, what counsel can I give?
I am so ignorant in what you ask
About. I know too little. But then - I've lived.
And so I try (I must) fulfill your task.
I say this first: please never hesitate.
It's better to get burned than regret,
Burns heal with time. Regrets become your fate.
I say this second: hearts are hard to get.
So please guard yours before it runs away
And treasure those you're given (they are rare).
I say this third: you will be led astray
By hearts... well, many things. But don't despair.
I say this fourth: I swear I stand by you
Like any proper (babbling) sister should.
I am so ignorant in what you ask
About. I know too little. But then - I've lived.
And so I try (I must) fulfill your task.
I say this first: please never hesitate.
It's better to get burned than regret,
Burns heal with time. Regrets become your fate.
I say this second: hearts are hard to get.
So please guard yours before it runs away
And treasure those you're given (they are rare).
I say this third: you will be led astray
By hearts... well, many things. But don't despair.
I say this fourth: I swear I stand by you
Like any proper (babbling) sister should.
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Some ideas just stick to your head until you get them out. It took me a month to get that one into a sonnet. But here it is.
I hope the first stanza isn't too... jarring? It felt a bit odd, but I couldn't think what to do with it.
I hope the first stanza isn't too... jarring? It felt a bit odd, but I couldn't think what to do with it.
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I like jarring, in the right place. Playing a little with the form is very definitely ok. A very nice piece, and some simple to make but hard to act on advice for all the broken-hearted poets at DA 